Thursday, February 4, 2016

Benjamin Franklin SR

LinZi Fuller
English 9 Honors-5
Smith
February 3, 2016
Benjamin Franklin Summary Response
Benjamin Franklin’s quote from 1957 portrays the ideology that obtaining freedom over temporary safety is more important because in the quote, those who are willing to give up necessary liberty in return for temporary safety do not deserve both liberty nor safety.
Benjamin Franklin’s 1957 quote incorrectly portrays that when one gives up the essential freedom, they cannot have liberty nor safety because when freedom is given up, more than one subject suffers. Franklin’s quote applies to our home security and how other events can affect the way the USA takes control of threats. The events that took place during 9/11 have impacted the USA forever with the constant fear of terrorism. After 9/11 occurred the U.S security tightened its grip on citizens, tourists, and immigrants entering and leaving the country. Many people have been debating over the subject of, whether airport security has gone too far. When going through security in the airport, Transportation Security Administration (TSA) will check bags, perform a metal detector scan, and, if needed, use a pat down procedure. Numerous reports from families have claimed that TSA pat checks are too invasive and harsh. A father and daughter were travelling when a juice box, accidentally not thrown away in her carry on causing the alarms to go off. The daughter (10 years old) was given a harsh and invasive pat down by a TSA worker, “Authorities followed up with a swab of the bag and a false-positive test for explosives, then a nearly 2-minute-long full-body pat-down in which a female TSA agent touched the girl’s buttocks and groin repeatedly” (The San Diego Union-Tribune). Airport security asks travelers to give up their freedom so the safety of others is assured,but TSA has repeatedly been reported for inappropriate touching, unnecessary searching, and taking measures to the extreme on younger children. Without airport luggage and personal checks, many dangerous situations could occur including  possibly another 9/11. The one goal of security is to make sure everyone else is safe even if it means a few extra minutes inspecting a suspicious person or item. When leaving a country or even another state, security will check luggage before you board the plane. With gun laws now in place, it is legal to carry a concealed weapon, “Over 1,200 firearms were discovered at TSA checkpoints across the nation in 2011. Many guns are found loaded with rounds in the chamber. Most passengers simply state they forgot they had a gun in their bag” (The TSA Blog: TSA Top 10 Good Catches of 2011). By having TSA security checks, we are giving up our freedom to carry weapons, but in return we are protecting others and ensuring the safety of the people. Many would argue that giving up one’s freedom for safety has both a negative impact on the individual and society. Franklin states that those who are willing to give up some freedom in return for temporary safety shouldn’t be deserving of both safety and freedom. He makes this claim because he believes that freedom is the essential part of living a worthwhile existence. This can be shown with Hitler and how he brainwashed Germans under his command. The people willingly voted him in, but he eventually took their freedom. This conclusion seems compelling  because without freedom, you don’t have actual safety. By giving up freedom for temporary safety, one exists under false ideas. While the people who survive under these pretenses may be safe, they do not have the freedom to live a fulfilling life. In some situations, people will opt to have their freedom taken from them, in order to gain refugee and safety. Often times however, this safety is not legitimate. For example, in North Korea, Dictator Kim Jong Un takes his citizens freedom and in return, provides them with perceived safety. The people of North Korea are kept within borders and are led to believe that they are safe when in reality they have lost one of the most important things: freedom. However, it is more complicated than that. If all you have is freedom, there is no one to protect you. Therefore, you have no safety. An example can be seen in the United States where citizens give up some freedom rights in order to have provided safety. Another demonstration can be shown with the airport security where citizens give up the right to firearms for a security that may prevent a future 9/11 terrorist attack, or the border along Mexico. The border of Mexico helps drug trafficking, reduces crime rate, and provides a safe travel between the countries.
In the end, it is much more efficient to give up some freedom in order to receive protection and safety.


Works Cited
"Man Upset over TSA Pat-down of Daughter, 10." The San Diego Union-Tribune. N.p., n.d. Web. 03 Feb. 2016.
"The TSA Blog: TSA Top 10 Good Catches of 2011." The TSA Blog: TSA Top 10 Good Catches of 2011. N.p., n.d. Web. 03 Feb. 2016.

Sunday, October 4, 2015

Othello S/R Act 5

Summary Response Outline

Summary:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea

Act 5 of William Shakespeare’s Othello, portrays how manipulation can affect one’s choices and actions.

  • Supporting ideas to prove main ideas
Iago has already manipulated Othello into thinking that his own wife, is having an affair with Cassio, Othello’s ex commander. Not only does Iago succeed in causing chaos between Othello and Desdemona but, also proceeds to create havoc between Roderigo and Cassio. Iago, knowing that Roderigo has strong feelings towards Desdemona makes Roderigo jealous of the false affair going on between Desdemona and Cassio. Out of jealousy, Roderigo intends to kills Cassio but, fails and instead severely wounds him due to his heavy armor. As this is happening, Othello becomes more immersed in the lie that Iago has created. Out of rage, Othello kills his wife only to later find out that Desdemona indeed was completely faithful. Othello then decides to turn the knife on himself.

  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea

Shakespeare illustrates the strength of lies and manipulation with Iago making Othello and Roderigo believe that Desdemona and Cassio are in an affair ultimately resulting in death during Othello act 5.


Response:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________

Othello, written by William Shakespeare correctly portrays the power that manipulation can have on one’s actions.

  • Claim 1:

Iago knows if he insults Cassio and Othello in the right way, two men of very high power, Iago can get whatever he wishes.

    • Set-up
Iago strongly seeks revenge on Othello for naming Cassio his lieutenant instead of him. Iago then comes up with a brutal plan that will end all harmony between everyone.
Iago plans to start a rumour about Desdemona (Othello’s wife) and Cassio (Othello’s ex lieutenant). With Iago’s plan in action, chaos rises between Cassio and Roderigo as well as Desdemona and Othello. Cassio becomes jealous of Desdemona and Cassio while Othello becomes enraged at his wife for cheating.

    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )

“Yet she must die, else she’ll betray more men.” (5.2.5-10)

    • Explanation of quotation to prove claim

Iago knows that Cassio thinks highly of Othello and would do anything to get his job back. Using this information as his base, Iago then proceeds to inform Othello and Roderigo that Desdemona, Othello’s wife and Cassio are having an affair. Roderigo, having strong feelings for Desdemona becomes extremely jealous towards Cassio. Iago uses Roderigo and influences him to kill Cassio. This plan fails and winds up with Roderigo only wounding Cassio. Meanwhile, Othello is enraged at his own wife following the story Iago has told him. Trusting Iago over his own wife, Othello then murders Desdemona only to find out that Desdemona was honest.

  • Counterclaim 1: However, ....

However, Iago did save Cassio’s life when Roderigo tried to kill him. Without Iago there to help Cassio, he would have most likely died.
    • Set-up

Roderigo comes in with intentions of killing Cassio but, instead severely wounds Cassio due to his strong armor. Iago then hears Cassio groaning in pain and rushes over to help out and calls for extra help.

    • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )

“Iago? O, I am spoiled, undone by villains. Give me some help!. (Iago) O, me lieutenant! What villains have done this?” (5.1.63-65)

    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim

Iago knowing that he may be framed for the action of trying to kill Cassio, cared about his friend and helped him out anyways.

  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? Rebuttal progression
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea

Proposal Paper
Rebuttal progression:

1st step: Describe a "naive response" or an opposing interpretation of your position. A "naive view" is a view that you personally disagree with or a view that misses something important. But don't use the word "naive." Say something like…
I used to think that...
A common view is that...
At first glance...
Many think that....
X argues that...
Critics of ____ propose…

A common view is that while Iago did set up the rumor about Desdemona and Cassio, he did in return save Cassio’s life.

2nd step: Briefly explain the logic or reasoning of this "naive view." Answer the question, "Why would someone think this way? Why would they find their answer or solution logical or reasonable?" Why did I think this way? Say something like...
We cannot deny that...
This way of making sense of the position makes a degree of sense [why?]
This position seems reasonable [why?]
I can understand why someone might interpret X in this way [explain how so]
These conclusions seem compelling [why?]

This position seems reasonable  because many people think that Othello is overreacting and not paying attention to his own wife.

3rd step: Provide a transition that indicates that you are going to contrast this "naive view." Say something like...
However...
But it's more complicated than that...
This interpretation is helpful, but it misses an important point...
This interpretation raises a fundamental question...
While this view seems plausible/reasonable at first glance, we should look closer...

But it’s more complicated than that because while Othello shows compassion for his wife, he is constantly being provided evidence that supports the affair. “... I saw the handkerchief!” (5.2.81). Iago showed Othello that Cassio has possession over Desdemona’s handkerchief. This piece of evidence is a critical reason for Othello believes Iago because the handkerchief was Othello’s first present to Desdemona.

Thursday, September 17, 2015

Summary Response Outline S/R 3


Summary:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea
    • Othello, by William Shakespeare, depicts the manipulation that main character, Iago uses as he deceivingly puts his plan of revenge into action.
  • Supporting ideas and explanations to prove main ideas
    • Iago starts by inducing Cassio, the newly hired Lieutenant, to think about how attractive Desdemona is. Iago convinces his good friend Roderigo that Cassio is in love with Othello’s wife Desdemona, which causes Roderigo to become angry.
    • Meanwhile, Iago slyly gets Cassio drunk, knowing that this will provoke the Lieutenant to do things he will regret. Cassio gets into a fight with Roderigo and Montano after consuming the alcohol which causes Othello to strip Cassio from his position as Lieutenant. In order to advance the idea that Cassio loves Desdemona, Iago mendaciously convinces Cassio to seek help from her to obtain his leadership back.
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
    • In his work, Othello, Shakespeare illustrates how Iago generates his plan by deludingley controlling the other characters and using them to his benefit.


Response:
  • Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb,correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays___________ because ___________ .
    • Othello, by William Shakespeare, correctly portrays the measures one will go to in order to obtain desired revenge, by deceitfully influencing others.
  • Claim 1:  
    • Iago exemplifies the risks one will take to get revenge by assuming an attitude of manipulation and using other Cassio to obtain his job.
  • Set- up
    • He deceives Cassio by convincing him of Desdemona’s beauty. After talking about Desdemona like that, Cassio would look like he is betraying Othello. Iago sets Cassio up in order to get his revenge, risking punishment.


  • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (Shakespeare 1.2.13-17).
    • Iago tricks Cassio and exemplifies this attitude when he comments to Cassio, “What an eye she has! Methinks it sounds a parley to  provocation.”...“And when she speaks, is it not an alarum to love?” ...“She is indeed perfection” (Cassio) (Shakespeare 2.3. 20-30)  


  • Explanation of quotation to prove claim: explain quote, connect to claim
    • Iago has a strong influence on Cassio and makes him admit to Desdemona’s beauty. Disregarding the risk he is taking and consequences that could possibly lie ahead, Iago exemplifies how revenge can flood one’s conscience and cause regretful actions.

  • Counterclaim 1: However, ....
    • However, Iago is replaced by Cassio and stripped of his identity as Lieutenant. Iago does whatever it takes to restore his reputation. He felt that he was wronged, and wanted to fix that by getting his job back and the achievement of being Othello’s “right-hand man”.  
  • Set-up
    • Iago believes that being Lieutenant is a part of him. He exhibits a state of longing and a feeling of betrayal. His languishing Iago stresses the importance of having this identity by doing what is needed to get his job back.
  • Evidence: Lead-in  “ quotation” (       )
    • He expresses his feelings of need by stating, “
    • Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim: explain quote, connect to claim
Cassio knowing that his reputation would be harmed, still drank. Cassio made the decision to drink while not under the influence of alcohol.
  • What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? (use rebuttal progression language)
  • Concluding sentence: restate main idea
  • Even though Cassio is now blamed, Iago was the one who brought up Desdemona. Not just Desdemona, but, a description of how beautiful and attractive she is.


Rebuttal Progression:
1st step: Describe a "naive response" or an opposing interpretation of your position. A "naive view" is a view that you personally disagree with or a view that misses something important. But don't use the word "naive." Say something like…
I used to think that...
A common view is that...
At first glance...
Many think that....
X argues that...
Critics of ____ propose...


Many think that Iago is full on deceiving Cassio and Roderigo because he sets them up to make a scene that is not actually what it seems like.


2nd step: Briefly explain the logic or reasoning of this "naive view." Answer the question, "Why would someone think this way? Why would they find their answer or solution logical or reasonable?" Why did I think this way? Say something like...
We cannot deny that...
This way of making sense of the position makes a degree of sense [why?]
This position seems reasonable [why?]
I can understand why someone might interpret X in this way [explain how so]
These conclusions seem compelling [why?]


This position seems reasonable because Iago does hold a high influence on Cassio and Roderigo. Iago wants to get back at Cassio but, Iago also knows he can’t take Cassio’s job without making Cassio look bad. Iago uses Roderigo’s love for Desdemona to do the “dirty” work for Iago. Iago starts a fight between Cassio and Roderigo. This fight in turn makes Cassio look bad and results in Cassio being fired and Iago made the new first commander.


3rd step: Provide a transition that indicates that you are going to contrast this "naive view." Say something like...
However...
But it's more complicated than that...
This interpretation is helpful, but it misses an important point...
This interpretation raises a fundamental question...
While this view seems plausible/reasonable at first glance, we should look closer…


While this view seems plausible at first glance, we should look closer at the real flaws in the plan. Cassio was chosen over Roderigo to be first commander. Roderigo being enraged at Othello’s decision, wants revenge. Using Iago who would also like revenge on Othello, plots out a plan that get Iago what he wants.

Monday, September 14, 2015

Topic sentence: 
title, author, strong verb, main idea:

 The tragedy, Othello, written by Shakespeare, tells a story of a well educated black man, Othello, in Venice who married a white woman, Desdemona, without the consent of her father. 

Supporting ideas and explanations to prove main ideas: 

Brabantio is shocked when he finds out from Iago and Roderigo that Othello had “taken advantage of Desdemona.” Enraged and wounded because Desdemona deceived him, Brabantio drags Othello into court during the middle of night hoping to punish Othello. He is hurt that Desdemona did not tell him and that she hid what she had done. Brabantio was in disbelief that Desdemona would do such a thing so he assumed that she was bewitched. Brabantio certainly felt that he was betrayed by Desdemona. 

Concluding sentence: restate main idea

 Othello, written by Shakespeare, not only a tragedy but a conflict of social mores between races and genders, is filled with jealousy and betrayal between friends and comrades. While it was socially unacceptable for Desdemona to be with Othello, because he was black, she was determined to remain loyal to Othello

. Summary Response Outline Summary: Response: Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb,correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays___________ because ___________ .

 The first act of the tragedy Othello, written by Shakespeare, correctly demonstrates how it is possible to be completely honest yet deceptive. During the court trial, Othello honestly tells the entire story and yet was deceptive because he secretly married Desdemona and was worried about the consequences and didn’t tell anybody until they were found out. 

Claim 1:

 Othello was deceptive because he was secretive in his actions with Desdemona until he was forced to reveal his marriage. Set-up Othello and Desdemona hid their relationship from Brabantio and the public. When Brabantio accuses Othello of “stealing” his daughter, Othello agrees to go to court with Brabantio. 

Evidence: Lead-in “quotation”

 Brabantio cluelessly yells to Iago and Roderigo “How did thoust know ‘twas she? -O, she deceives me. Past thought!-- What said she to you?--Get more tapers. Raise all my kindred.-- Are they married think you?” (1,1,184-189)

 Explanation of quotation to prove claim: explain quote, connect to claim

 Brabantio had no idea that Othello and Desdemona were married or were in any way connected. They knew that what they had done was not socially acceptable and would at least result in uncomfortable consequences thus they were deceitful when they hid the truth about their marriage. 

Counterclaim 1:

 However, Othello was completely truthful during the trial so he was honest. Set-up During the trial, Othello admits to nothing but loving Desdemona. Desdemona then comes forward and vouches for Othello. After the trial, Othello is told he must go to war. When Desdemona hears the news, she requests to go with Othello to Cyprus to be with and help him. Evidence: Lead-in “ quotation” Othello says to Brabantio and the court, “This only is the witchcraft I have used” (Shakespeare 1.3 9-10) 

Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim: explain quote

, connect to claim Othello explains how he and Desdemona both have real feelings for each other. He tells the whole story and does not leave out any details. He tells Brabantio and the court of how he shared some of his sorrows with Desdemona and she loved him for them and he loved her for loving them.

 What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? (use rebuttal progression language) Concluding sentence: restate main idea Although Othello was honest when he and Desdemona were exposed, he was still deceitful because he refused to reveal to the public that he Desdemona had gotten married. 


 Rebuttal Progression: 1st step: Describe a "naive response" or an opposing interpretation of your position. A "naive view" is a view that you personally disagree with or a view that misses something important. But don't use the word "naive." Say something like… I used to think that... A common view is that… At first glance... Many think that.... X argues that... Critics of ____ propose…

 Many think that Othello is devoid of blame because he was honest in court. 2nd step: Briefly explain the logic or reasoning of this "naive view." 

Answer the question, "Why would someone think this way? Why would they find their answer or solution logical or reasonable?" Why did I think this way? Say something like... We cannot deny that... This way of making sense of the position makes a degree of sense [why?] This position seems reasonable [why?] I can understand why someone might interpret X in this way [explain how so] These conclusions seem compelling [why?] 

This position seems reasonable because Othello did not try to hide anything in court. He wanted to tell Brabantio about his relationship with Desdemona and how they loved each other and decided to get married. 

3rd step:

 Provide a transition that indicates that you are going to contrast this "naive view." Say something like... However... But it's more complicated than that... This interpretation is helpful, but it misses an important point... This interpretation raises a fundamental question... While this view seems plausible/reasonable at first glance, we should look closer... While this view seems plausible at first glance, we should look closer at the fact that Othello and Desdemona’s marriage was kept secret and was done without Brabantio’s blessing. The reason that they hid their relationship from the world was because it was wrong in the eyes of the world. They were not honest with the people they knew because they did not tell them about their marriage.
Bully Summary and Response Redo Drake H. and LinZi F. September 13, 2015 Summary


 Summary:

 Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb, main idea

 The movie “Bully” by Lee Hirsch identifies the impact on how people view themselves and the world.

 Supporting ideas and explanations to prove main ideas

The victims in “Bully” were suicidal and depressed because their normal day would include being physically and verbally abused. The world to them was not fair but they knew nothing else than abuse to they endured it. The reason that they had these problems with depression and suicide was because they did not understand why they should live. Life for them was hell, so why endure it?

 Concluding sentence: restate main idea Bullying has an impact on what people think of other life and other people. Response Topic sentence: title, author, strong verb,correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays___________ because ___________ . The movie “Bully” by Lee Hirsch correctly identifies that bullying is a problem in schools.

 Claim 1:

Set-up

 Kids are bullied because they are too kind and loving to retaliate. They endure it because they believe that they can be better than their aggressors. Evidence: Lead-in “ quotation” ( ) Alex Libby’s dad recounts Alex saying, “I want to be the bigger man” (Hirsch). Explanation of quotation to prove claim: explain quote, connect to claim Alex’s father is talking about how Alex overflowed with love. He could never hurt anyone else the way that they hurt him. Alex was always striving to be better than the bullies. Humans are left with a choice. They can choose to be scum or they can choose to do the right thing. Alex did not allow jealousy, betrayal, pride, prejudice, power, gender, race, and revenge to rule his choices. Everyone should strive to do the same.

 Counterclaim 1: However, ....

However, kids are bullied because they are afraid to stand up to their aggressors. Set-up Not everyone is born with large amounts of courage, but everyone should stand up for what they believe in.

Evidence: Lead-in “ quotation” ( )

Mr. Libby was talking to Alex about being bullied and he said, “Stand up for yourself because if not people start seeing you as a punching bag and no one respects a punching bag” (Mr. Libby) 

Explanation of quotation to prove counterclaim:
explain quote,

 connect to claim Alex convinces himself that the kids are just “messing around and having fun”. His father explains to him that he needs to stand up for himself instead of letting them bully him. Alex never had the courage to stand up to the bullies. He knows nothing other than being bullied so he thinks that it is normal. Everyone needs to stand up for themselves and demand respect so that they are not victimized.

 What are the strengths/ flaws of this argument? (use rebuttal progression language) Concluding sentence: restate main idea

Although people should stand up to other people when they are bullied they do not always have a choice. That is where the people around the bully and the bullied person need to step in to stop the bullying. It is not just the responsibility of the person being bullied to stop the bully.

 Rebuttal progression:

 1st step:

 Describe a "naive response" or an opposing interpretation of your position. A "naive view" is a view that you personally disagree with or a view that misses something important. But don't use the word "naive." Say something like… I used to think that... A common view is that… At first glance... Many think that.... X argues that... Critics of ____ propose…

 A common view of bullying is that many kids have a choice over whether or not they are bullied and can stand up to their aggressors.

 2nd step:

 Briefly explain the logic or reasoning of this "naive view." Answer the question, "Why would someone think this way? Why would they find their answer or solution logical or reasonable?" Why did I think this way? Say something like... We cannot deny that... This way of making sense of the position makes a degree of sense [why?] This position seems reasonable [why?] I can understand why someone might interpret X in this way [explain how so] These conclusions seem compelling [why?]

 This seems reasonable because people do need to stand up for themselves. Everyone should have courage to stand up for what they believe in.

 3rd step: Provide a transition that indicates that you are going to contrast this "naive view." Say something like... However... But it's more complicated than that... This interpretation is helpful, but it misses an important point... This interpretation raises a fundamental question... While this view seems plausible/reasonable at first glance, we should look closer…


 However, it’s more complicated than that because people don’t always have a choice. If it is one against 5 it is not fair. There is nothing they can do except turn the other cheek. They also might not retaliate because they believe that they can be better than the bullies.

Wednesday, September 2, 2015

Scribe: 9-1-2015 Mr. Rosenberg was our substitute today Reviewed our vocabulary from Power Plus vocabulary book Background on Othello Shakespeare is uses a different language and tone compared to today. Changes the basic sentence structure Be mindful of when the book/play was written Watched the opening scenes of Othello two different videos- older version and more modern version Notes: the language pronunciation is much different than modern english, grammar is very “proper” sounding, and the tone in which they talk in. Othello married the senator's daughter and the senator is not happy Read act one in Othello- act one scene one for homework