Tuesday, September 1, 2015

Topic Sentence: The movie “Bully” by Lee Hirsch identifies the impact that bullying holds over kids. Supporting detail and explanation of ideas to prove main point: The victims in “Bully” were suicidal and depressed because their normal day would include being physically and verbally abused. Concluding sentence: Bullying has an impact on people. Conclusion: Throughout the film, the audience experienced each victim's personal story. Kids that are bullied care and love others too much to hurt anyone else. Response: Topic sentence: The movie “Bully” by Lee Hirsch correctly depicts the harsh reality that bullying brings. title, author, strong verb, agree/disagree (correctly portrays/ incorrectly portrays), because ___________ and ______________ Claim 1: Kids are bullied because they are too kind and loving to retaliate. They endure it because they believe that they can be better than their aggressors. Set up: Quote: Alex Libby’s dad recounts Alex saying, “I want to be the bigger man” (Hirsch). Quote explanation: Alex’s father is talking about how Alex overflowed with love. He could never hurt anyone else the way that they hurt him. Alex was always striving to be better than the bullies. Tie in: Today, we are left with a choice. We can choose to be scum or we can choose to do the right thing. Alex did not allow jealousy, betrayal, pride, prejudice, and power to rule his choices. We need to model our lives after his to make the right decisions. Counterclaim Counterclaim: However, kids are bullied because they are afraid to stand up to their aggressors. Set up: People are not born with massive amounts of courage. Quote: “Stand up for yourself because if not people start seeing you as a punching bag and no one respects a punching bag” (Mr. Libby) Quote explanation: Alex convinces himself that the kids are just “messing around and having fun”. His father explains to him that he needs to stand up for himself instead of letting them bully him. Tie in: Knowing this we stand up for ourselves and demand respect so that we are not victimized. Rebuttal progression: 1st step: Describe a "naive response" or an opposing interpretation of your position. A "naive view" is a view that you personally disagree with or a view that misses something important. But don't use the word "naive." Say something like… I used to think that... A common view is that... At first glance... Many think that.... X argues that... Critics of ____ propose… A common view of bullying is that many kids have a choice and can stand up to their aggressors. (Uhh does this counterclaim?) 2nd step: Briefly explain the logic or reasoning of this "naive view." Answer the question, "Why would someone think this way? Why would they find their answer or solution logical or reasonable?" Why did I think this way? Say something like... We cannot deny that... This way of making sense of the position makes a degree of sense [why?] This position seems reasonable [why?] I can understand why someone might interpret X in this way [explain how so] These conclusions seem compelling [why?] We cannot deny that we too are interested in why some people don’t stand up to their bullies and instead take the abuse. 3rd step: Provide a transition that indicates that you are going to contrast this "naive view." Say something like... However... But it's more complicated than that... This interpretation is helpful, but it misses an important point... This interpretation raises a fundamental question... While this view seems plausible/reasonable at first glance, we should look closer... However, it’s more complicated than that because some bullies threaten their victims while others do tell adults and supervisors, but, they do not seem to help.

1 comment:

  1. Good start to your summary- make sure to attribute ideas back to the director/author and keep from using opinion words/phrases.

    Good topic sentence for your response other than needing a why to it. Good work on your claim. Make sure to use those same elements in your counterclaim: set-up, lead in, proper citations (Hirsch)

    Where is your rebuttal progression or conclusion? Can you post this in outline format next time not paragraph form?